寫作: The Phenomenon of Empty Nest 空巢現(xiàn)象

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The Phenomenon of Empty Nest
空巢老人”指那些到了退休年齡，身邊卻無子女共同生活的老人
這種現(xiàn)象出現(xiàn)的原因
如何解決由此帶來的問題

The Phenomenon of Empty Nest

Currently, an increasing number of old people live by themselves, with their children studying or working away, which is referred as the phenomenon of empty nest. According to a recent survey conducted by CCTV, the past five years has witnessed a sharp increase in.

To account for this phenomenon, people have come up with various reasons listed below. To begin with，due to the fierce competition and globalization, many young people have to pursue their career in a remote place. What’s more，the improvement in economy and housing condition makes it possible for a family to have more than one apart-ment. Therefore, the young and the old live separately.

To this problem, in my mind, there are at least several approa-ches. The government and community should establish clubs to engage the attention of the elderly, encouraging the old people themselves to cultivate hobbies. In addition，the young should always bear in mind to extend their love and care to their parents. (169 詞）

“一句話”點評
毫無疑問，第一段的大寫字母和數(shù)據(jù)能迅速抓住閱卷老師的眼球。同時使用了 witness，sharp等好詞，以及the past five years作主語的修辭手法，無疑增加了文章的亮點。

快捷構(gòu)思
第一段:直接提出該段中心“目前,在中國的農(nóng)村和城市都有 “啃老族” ”。而后，“一句話”更加形象地說明最近五年“啃老族”的比例在增加。
第二段:模板句提出該段主題句“這種現(xiàn)象出現(xiàn)的原因”。緊接著歹lj 出了兩種原因：pursue their career in a remote place 和 the improvement in economy and housing condi-tion makes it possible for a family to have more than one apartment.
第三段:直接展現(xiàn)該段中心“如何解決由此帶來的問題”。分別從政府和年輕人兩方面給出解決問題的辦法。

美麗詞句
1. Currently，an increasing number of old people live by themselves, with their children studying or working away, which is referred as the phenomenon of empty nest.(亮點句式,用了非限制性定語從句。）
2. fierce competition and globalization 激烈的競爭和全球化
3.pursue one’s career 找工作(優(yōu)于習慣用的 look for one’s job)
4.engage the attention 吸引注意力
5.cultivate hobbies 培養(yǎng)興趣
6.bear in mind 牢記