The First Date

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Now he is combing his hair and being dressed in his best suit. It seems as if he was ready for a date. Actually that＇ s what he keeps considering these days. About a week ago, one of his friends taught him how to chat and make friends through the Internet. And that was really important for him who can hardly get a date in the real world. So now as his first blind date approaches, his mind is full of imagination. Very excited and a little afraid, he begins the trip to the agreed place.

What his net girlfriend is called sounds romantic Red Rose. And he thinks the girl has plenty of experience and abundant knowledge. He has tried lots of methods and finally won her heart. Now it＇s time for a date. He even boasted to his friends how lucky he was. Taking his coming wonderful romance for granted, he smiles at times on the trip.

Soon he gets to the destination, a lovely park. He can see someone holding a rose waiting there, and the rose is their password. He can＇t wait to rush to her, but as he comes near, he can tell that is in fact an old lady. Oh, how can such an old lady be my Red Rose! He complains to himself. But there＇s nobody else nearby. And at that very moment, the lady finds him standing there still and probably in a daze. He feels cold and wants to get away from the embarrassing situation. "Hi, do you have a date here?" The lady greets him. "Oh, sorry, I just went the wrong way. I have a date somewhere else..." his legs trembling, his hands holding his rose at the back. "Oh, I see..."The lady turns away and he quickly grasps the chance to slip a

Back to his study, he turns on his computer and changes his motto as follows: "I will never believe the virtual romance any more!!!" And what he does next is to put Red Rose into his blacklist.

With a long sigh, he sits down, tired and hopeless. Although it＇s sunny outside, he feels his life in an endless darkness.

簡(jiǎn) 評(píng)

網(wǎng)絡(luò)世界，想必大家都非常熟悉或熱衷吧!這篇敘事文給我們講述了一段網(wǎng)絡(luò)帶來(lái)的陰差陽(yáng)錯(cuò)的戀愛(ài)故事。啞然失笑之后，我們心里是否還會(huì)留下點(diǎn)什么呢?也許，虛擬世界中并不只是無(wú)窮的樂(lè)趣?

文章構(gòu)思巧妙，語(yǔ)言平實(shí)，表達(dá)流暢，節(jié)奏明快，生動(dòng)幽默，有聲有色，可讀性強(qiáng)，寓意深刻。值得一提的是主人公的心理刻畫(huà)真實(shí)、準(zhǔn)確、到位。一個(gè)心情經(jīng)歷波瀾起伏，由喜轉(zhuǎn)悲的少年的氣惱的、狼狽的卻又無(wú)奈的形象躍然紙上，令人忍俊不禁。一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)的使用使文章更顯生動(dòng)、傳神。當(dāng)然，若能再略施筆墨，對(duì)劇中人物，尤其是“old lady”添加一些描寫(xiě)，相信更能形成理想與現(xiàn)實(shí)的落差，突出對(duì)比的效果。