專八作文之范文賞析--宿舍安全
題目：On Dormitory Security
寫作要求
Dormitories on campus were reported to be broken into and burglaries happened regularly.
What should both students and universities do to reduce this kind of crime?
Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:
On Dormitory Security
You are to write in three parts.
In the rst part, state speci cally what your opinion is.
In the second part, provide one or two reasons to support your idea OR describe your idea.
In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.
Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriatenes. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.
審題思路
本題是一道問題解決/建議型的題目，一般建議型題目的寫法是復(fù)述題干內(nèi)容 ，直截了當(dāng)提出自己的建議, 然后擺事實講道理說明該建議有什么好處 ，最后把文章引入一個自然的總結(jié)段中即可。但是根據(jù)這個題目的題干，重點不是用理由來支持某個建議，而是詳述該建議是什么，即分小點說明學(xué)校和學(xué)生應(yīng)該分別做些什么。
范文賞析
On Dormitory Security
It is reported that recently in quite a few universities, dormitories on campus have been broken into and burglaries have happened every now and then. In fact, students have complained a lot that burglaries are like nightmares in their college years. I think it’s high time that both students and universities did something to reduce and eliminate this kind of crime.
引言部分：作者先說明有報道說最近寢室遭竊的現(xiàn)象很多，困擾著學(xué)生們，然后提出學(xué)生和學(xué)校都應(yīng)采取措施。
On the one hand, there are some measures which universities can take. First, universities should have all the dormitory doors and windows checked, find out and repair the broken ones so that thieves cannot go in easily. Second, the number of university security staff should be increased. Security personnel should patrol on campus and cross-question any suspicious person.
On the other hand, students should also do something to protect their belongings. First, when they leave their dormitories, they should keep doors and windows locked to keep out sneak10 thieves.Second, students should lock their valuables11 up in lockers12. In this way, they can reduce the risks of burglaries happening.
主體部分：作者分兩方面來說，并在每方面下面又分了幾個小點，這樣一則可以豐富內(nèi)容，二則使整篇文章邏輯清晰，銜接緊湊，成為一個完整的整體。
In one word, both students and universities should do something to reduce burglaries in dormitories. And only in a safe dormitory can a student live and study happily.
總結(jié)部分：作者用in one word自然而然地對上文進(jìn)行了總結(jié)，并進(jìn)一步說明只有寢室安全才能讓學(xué)生生活和學(xué)習(xí)得更開心。
亮點回放
1. be broken into: “被闖入”，常用于指房子有竊賊闖入。
2. every now and then: “時而，不時” ；近義詞有every now and again ，every so often, more often than not等 。
3. nightmare: “噩夢，使人特別痛苦的事情或經(jīng)歷”。
4. it s high time that: “該做某事的時候到了” ；如果在time前面有high ，the very等詞 ，那么從句中要使用過去時。
5.eliminate: “除去，消除” ；這里還可以使用get rid of，root out ，wipe out ，weed out等來表示 同一意思。
6. personnel: “職員” ；作名詞 ，注意personnel和personal（個人的）的區(qū)別。
7. patrol: “巡邏 ，巡查”。
8. cross-question: “盤問，審問” ；該詞 的使用體現(xiàn)了作者詞匯量的豐富和用詞的精到。
9. suspicious: “可疑的，多疑的” ；也可以使用doubtable和questionable來代替 。
10. sneak : 常用作動詞，表示 “偷偷摸摸做/走”，此處用作形容詞，表示“出其不意的，暗中進(jìn)行的”。
11. valuables: valuable常用作形容詞 ，表示 “貴重的” ；當(dāng)用作名詞且為復(fù)數(shù)時 ，表示 “貴重物品”。
12. locker: “更衣箱，儲物柜” ；該詞用得非常到位 。
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