專八作文之范文賞析--校園政治的利與弊
題目：The Benefits and Dangers of Campus Politics
寫作要求
Nowadays many college students are interested in campus politics, including running for heads of various communities. What are the possible bene ts and dangers of this enthusiasm for campus politics?
Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:
The Bene ts and Dangers of Campus Politics
You are to write in three parts.
In the rst part, state speci cally what your idea is.
In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.
In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.
Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.
審題思路
本題是一道分析利弊/差異型的題目，要求分析參與校園政治的利與弊，因此很明顯文章中必須包含：
1. 概述該現(xiàn)象，指出這樣做有利有弊；
2. 具體說明好處在哪里，弊端在哪里；
3. 重申自己的觀點(diǎn)，再次概述利弊點(diǎn)。
范文賞析
The Bene ts and Dangers of Campus Politics
Campus politics has improved the quality of students’ life on campus and is playing an important role in college life. While we may advocate it because of the benefits, we cannot ignore its problems.
引言部分：作者先明確表明“校園政治”是大學(xué)生活非常重要的一部分，但在強(qiáng)調(diào)其帶來的好處的同時(shí)，作者提醒不能忽視其帶來的問題。
On the positive side , college students will grow mature and develop their abilities from participation in campus politics. For one thing, by attending campus political activities, students will learn how to handle relationships with all sides in a more mature way, which will better prepare them for life after graduation. For another, they can develop their sense of responsibility as well as practical capabilities, especially management and coordination capacity, because the campus political activities provide students with a stage to show themselves and bring their abilities into full play.
On the negative side, campus politics might bring some problems. Too much participation in campus politics might influence study. Besides, some students’ being keen on campus politics is for fame and gain, which is harmful to the healthy development of mentality . Therefore, schools and teachers should give necessary instructions to students on their participation in campus politics.
主體部分：作者先從積極面分析了參加校園競選等活動帶來的兩大益處：使學(xué)生們變得成熟并增強(qiáng)了責(zé)任心和實(shí)際能力；接著又從消極面分析了參與“校園政治”可能帶來的問題：對學(xué)習(xí)和身心健康發(fā)展的影響。針對這些問題，作者簡單提出學(xué)校和老師應(yīng)給予必要的指導(dǎo)。就寫作手法而言，作者主要是進(jìn)行邏輯論證，正反對比。全文長短句的運(yùn)用非常恰當(dāng)，主要是用短句點(diǎn)題，說明觀點(diǎn)，用長句進(jìn)行解釋說明。
All in all, we cannot deny the bene ts campus politics brings to college students, but we should also be aware of the potential danger it may hold for them as well. With necessary guidance, campus politics can be a good stage for students to grow.
總結(jié)部分：作者用all in all自然而然地引入到了文章的結(jié)尾。作者先概述了上面提及的兩個(gè)方面，然后重申了自己的觀點(diǎn)：在恰當(dāng)?shù)闹笇?dǎo)下，校園政治是大學(xué)生成長的良好舞臺。
亮點(diǎn)回放
1. campus politics: “校園政治” ；下文還使用了campus political activities來指 同一意思 。
2. advocate: “提倡，主張” ；此處也可以用support, back等替代。另外注意advocate也可以作名詞使用 ，be an advocate for/of sth.是 ……的提倡者/支持者 。
3. on the positive side: “從積極面來說” ；也可以用from the positive perspective來代替 。
4. better prepare: 通常prepare的用法是be prepared for（為……做好 了準(zhǔn)備 ），此處使用 了主動形式prepare sb. for sth. （讓某人為某事做好 了準(zhǔn)備 ）。better是well的比較級 ，所以此處表示 “使他們更好地為……做好準(zhǔn)備”。
5. capability: “能力，性能” ，與下文 的capacity, ability為近義詞 ，這些近義詞 的使用使文章富有變化性 ，有亮點(diǎn)不單調(diào) 。
6. coordination: “協(xié)調(diào)” ；此處近義詞有organization, regulation等 。
7. bring their abilities into full play : “使他們的能力充分發(fā)揮” ；此處的bring ... into full play是固定搭配 ，比簡單使用fully display要正式。
8. being keen on: “渴望，愛好” ，比單純地使用like要好，此處的sb. s being keen on整體用作主語，不過這里還可以使用enthusiasm，passion，zeal等，后面接for 。
9. mentality: “心理狀態(tài)” ，此處還可以使用morality來代替。
10. instruction : “指導(dǎo)”；與下文的guidance為近義詞，通常的用法是instruct sb. to do sth.或者instruct sb. on sth.。
11. deny: “否認(rèn)，拒絕給予” ；搭配有deny sb. sth.（拒絕給予某人某物 ）。
12. be aware of: “意識到” ；近義詞為be conscious of，realize等 。
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