考研英語(yǔ)小作文批改：投訴信0-4分例文1
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考研英語(yǔ)待批改作文：
0-4分
第一篇：
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me, preferably, as soon as possible,and I would like to have this matter setteled by three days.
Thank you for consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：
Li Ming.
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy(改為bought) in your shop in february（拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為February）.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life（不能理解你的意思）. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october（這是中式英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)刪除，此外月份要大寫）. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this（改為these） circustances(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為circumstances), I find it terrible to your work and upset me.(用法錯(cuò)誤，這個(gè)句型是I find it +adj+that/to do sth.)
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me（加the money）, preferably, as soon as possible (preferably 后面加進(jìn)一步的要求，加動(dòng)詞原型),and I would like to have this matter setteled （拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為settled）by（后面是具體的時(shí)間，此處應(yīng)改為in） three days.
Thank you for （加your）consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming.
2分
同學(xué)你好，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)與后面的單詞空一格。語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤比較多，建議你多背一些好的句型，此外，再細(xì)心一點(diǎn)，盡量避免出現(xiàn)單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤。
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0-4分
第一篇：
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me, preferably, as soon as possible,and I would like to have this matter setteled by three days.
Thank you for consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
考研英語(yǔ)作文批改點(diǎn)評(píng)如下：
Li Ming.
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy(改為bought) in your shop in february（拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為February）.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life（不能理解你的意思）. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october（這是中式英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)刪除，此外月份要大寫）. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this（改為these） circustances(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為circumstances), I find it terrible to your work and upset me.(用法錯(cuò)誤，這個(gè)句型是I find it +adj+that/to do sth.)
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me（加the money）, preferably, as soon as possible (preferably 后面加進(jìn)一步的要求，加動(dòng)詞原型),and I would like to have this matter setteled （拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為settled）by（后面是具體的時(shí)間，此處應(yīng)改為in） three days.
Thank you for （加your）consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming.
2分
同學(xué)你好，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)與后面的單詞空一格。語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤比較多，建議你多背一些好的句型，此外，再細(xì)心一點(diǎn)，盡量避免出現(xiàn)單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤。
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