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With the speedy development of our society, we can often witness immoral behavior in public. I still remember that my parents and I once took sightseeing in a tourist attraction, while I found many tourists discarded their picnic leftovers.
It is my view that immoral behavior will bring a good many problems. As a nation renowned in the world for many of its virtue, the Chinese people have been practicing good behaviors. I think owing to the factor, our country always be respected. On the contrary, if we let the above-mentioned tendency continue as it is, our country will lose faith in other countries.
Hence, it is imperative for us to take effective measures to enhance the awareness of people that good behaviors are of great significance. For one thing, we should appeal to our authorities to take positive methods to cultivate people’s good behavior. For another, ordinary people should also pay more attention to individual behavior. Only in this way can we have a brilliant future.
作文批改如下：
With the speedy development of our society, we can often witness immoral behavior in public. I still remember(加ed) that my parents and I once took sightseeing in a tourist attraction, while I found many tourists discarded their picnic leftovers.
It is my view that immoral behavior will bring a good many problems. As a nation renowned in the world for many of its virtue, the Chinese people have been practicing good behaviors. I think owing to the（改為this） factor, our country always be（改為is） respected. On the contrary, if we let the above-mentioned tendency continue as it is, our country will lose faith in other countries（用法錯誤）.
Hence, it is imperative for us to take effective measures to enhance the awareness of people that good behaviors are of great significance. For one thing, we should appeal to our authorities to take positive methods to cultivate people’s good behavior. For another, ordinary people should also pay more attention to individual behavior. Only in this way can we have a brilliant future.
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