英語六級5分作文范文批改2
英語六級待批改作文：
The cellphone is more and more common in our daily life, you can hardly imagine that few years ago, cellphone is the previlege for little people. In 1999, the number of cellphone users are just 200, then it came to about 500 in 2002. In 2005, the data sharply increased to 900.
Why the users of cellphone increase so quickly? Initially,the primary reason is that the increase of income. With the higher income, people would willing to enjoy a more convinence life. Another equally significant reason for this change is the decrease of the cost of making a cellphone. Taking advantage of the high technology, the indurstry can use little labor and cheaper meterial to produce cellphones. All of these have made the price of cellphone affordable.
This phenomenon is a signal of the increase of people's life comdition and the spread of high technology, which is a really good thing for the society. There is no doubt that in the future, with the continuesly increase of economy and technology, more and more people will have the cellphone and enjoy the convinence of it.
英語六級作文批改如下：
The cellphone（這不是一個詞，加空格） is more and more common in our daily life, you can hardly imagine that few years ago, cellphone is the(改為a)previlege（拼寫錯誤，改為privilege）for little people（改為a few people）. In 1999, the number of cellphone users are(改為is) just 200, then it came to about 500 in 2002. In 2005, the data sharply increased to 900.
Why the users of cellphone increase（改為increased） so quickly? Initially, the primary reason is that the increase of income. With the higher income, people would （加be）willing to enjoy a more convinence(改為convenient) life. Another equally significant reason for this change is the decrease of the cost of making a cellphone. Taking advantage of the high technology, the indurstry(拼寫錯誤，改為industry) can use little labor and cheaper meterial(拼寫錯誤，改為materials) to produce cellphones. All of these have made the price of cellphone affordable.
This phenomenon is a signal of the increase of people's life（改為living）comdition（拼寫錯誤，改為condition）and the spread of high technology, which is a really good thing for the society（語法錯誤）. There is no doubt that in the future, with thecontinuesly（改為continuous） increase(改為improvement) of economy and technology, more and more people will have the (刪除)cellphone and enjoy the convinence（拼寫錯誤，改為convenience） of it.
The number of 是…的數(shù)量的意思，謂語動詞用單數(shù)；a number of 是大量的意思，謂語動詞用單數(shù)。Initially和the primary reason的意思一樣。寫作文時細(xì)心一點(diǎn)，盡量避免單詞拼寫的錯誤。注意固定搭配。Which放在逗號后面，修飾的是前面一整句話的內(nèi)容。
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