英語六級14分作文范文批改2
英語六級待批改作文：
Nowadays, more and more people are attracted by TV shows. It is a great shock in China and many youngsters want to attend this shows because they want become famous overnight.
The advantages of the TV shows are clear to many people. To begin with, some young people think that the TV shows is a good ideal. It can provide a chance to show their talents. What’s more , it can enriching audiences’ spiritual world. Last but not least, in terms of business, the shows can help the channels achieve huge incomes.
It can be justified without exaggeration that everything has two sides. TV shows is a good way to make success but not the only way. I advise young people should think twice before attend the shows. To say the least, if they decide to attend the TV show, they should keep balance with shows and learning.
英語六級作文批改如下：
Nowadays, more and more people are attracted by TV shows. It is a great shock in China and many youngsters want to attend this shows because they want become famous overnight.
The advantages of the TV shows are clear to many people. To begin with, some young people think that the TV shows is a good ideal（翻譯不通）. It can provide a chance to show their talents. What’s more, it can enriching（改為enrich）audiences’ spiritual world. Last but not least, in terms of business, the shows can help the channels achieve huge incomes.
It can be justified without exaggeration that everything has two sides. TV shows is a good way to make success（改為succeed） but not the only way. I advise young people should think twice before attend the shows. To say the least, if they decide to attend the TV show, they should keep balance with shows and learning.
同學你好，作文寫的還不錯，而且句型也有變化。但是第三段最好以你認為…開頭，所以缺少了寫創意，但是不至于讓批卷老師因為“眼花”而認為你是跑題，因為他們工作量很大，看作文時都是找標志性的語句。
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