BEC名師點評作文（5）
BEC商務英語，商務英語考試中的No.1，含金量已經無需多言。但是，無論是還在猶豫是否要參加BEC考試的，還是已經通過BEC考試的，都在疑惑到底學了BEC有什么用呢?讓我們通過下面的學習來看看BEC到底都能讓我們獲得什么。
本期作文題目：
Formulate a smoking policy for your office whichis fair to both smokers and nonsmokers. Write a 40-50 word memo informing all staff of the policy.
老師提示：
我們需要確定，如果我是公司職員，我要在這篇memo中獲得什么信息?是不是要知道：
1.新的吸煙政策從什么時候開始;
2.吸煙區劃定在什么地方?
網友作文一：
TO: All Employees
FROM: CEO, Willan Smith
SUBJECT: NEW SMOKING POLICY
For all the employees, especially smokers,[1] plz be aware that our company's new smokingpolicy has been formulated as follow: A main smoking area's going to be restricted before NextMONDAY[2], anyone is not allowed to smoker in non-smoking zone even in the washing room.[3]
Plz target the smoking and non-smoking area and stick to the company's new policy.[4]
Thx.
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[1]去掉，抬頭已經寫過給所有的員工，所以直接從正文開始就行了，費這個事干什么?
[2]時間不確切，最好是 from next Monday. Before 這個期限是什么時候?如果不能給出確切信息，就不要說，還不如換成具體的吸煙區域更好: be restricted to the room next to the toilet.
[3]你經常在洗手間吸煙嗎?或者你們公司有這樣的同事?把這句話去掉。
[4]添加：to ensure that it is fair to all of you.
網友作文二：
To: All staff
From: Hope0068
Everybody know that smoking is dangerous for your health. And the The studies didn't justpoint to the ill effects of smoking on those who smoke--non-smokers, too. [1] Notice is herebygiven that the smoking area is located in the special corner[2] of the first floor of this building.This come into force on[3] September 15th.
Thanks.
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[1]Memo 的主要作用就是提醒同事們注意事項，這和吸煙有多有害不相干，去掉。改為：to assureworking environment
[2]一般的公司都應該給個room
[3]from
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