Leaving——A Moment of Sudden Growth

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I am the only child in my family. Like many other children,I follow a routine way to a so called success: primary school,junior school, a key high school and finally, a prestigious university. Lacking in experiences, I keep on feeling that I am only growing big, but no mature. But two leavings left deep impressions on me, giving me a strong sense of growth.

The first leaving occurred about 4 years ago, the days after I received my junior school diploma. It was a summer afternoon.My father rushed home, singing with a red envelope in his hand.Suddenly, a sense of nervousness and excitement came over me.As I expected, this was the admission letter to a famous key high school. My parents began to laugh happily and proudly. But I could easily perceive a sense of grievance and anxiety. That＇s true. My new school life would be rooted in school alone. I have never thought it a challenge for me but they did.

On the registration day,my parents were rushing here and there,as busy bees. But I was idled, with nothing to help. I am a doted child, though I was never willing to confess. My mother was cleaning the room while my father was making bed for me.You can hardly imagine a middle-aged man of 1.80 meters tall huddling in a corner of the bed, doing the job like an acrobat.Suddenly, tears slipped down my cheeks. I turned around. I couldn＇t tell whether it was a sense of guilt or the power of love.I could not. I couldn＇t help glimpsing at my father now and then. A few white hairs were conspicuous, shining in the sun.When the moment to say good bye came at last, I dared not look at my parents＇ eyes. I murmured goodbye and they staggered out, looking back from time to time. At that moment, I realized what were Growing Pains. I decided to do my best, not only for myself.

Three years passed quickly. Luckily, I received the admission letter from Fudan University. That was a peaceful and quiet day. We celebrated the success, the success of my family.

On the first day of my campus life, I intended to go to the university alone, but my parents insisted on accompanying me. It was still my mother who did the cleaning. But I found myself a capable helper. With most of the job done by me, they decided to leave early. Another moment of leaving! There were no touching words, nor tears or laughter, sadness or happiness,just saying goodbye to each other. But I found confidence in my parents＇tones. That was an appeased leave, too pacified to believe. It was a common way of farewell between adults. And now I did belong to one of them. Yes, I should be independent just as little birds must leave nests when growing up. My parents got it. They trust me, and I am worthy of the trust. I could feel the power of growth.

Farewell,dear mom and dad. Transient parting is the prelude to a newt fascinating get together.

簡評

李瑩同學(xué)的這篇作文通過細(xì)膩而獨(dú)到的視角，描述了兩次與父母的道別，并點(diǎn)出了別離是成長道路上的重要一課。從娓娓的敘事中，我們可以看到一個同學(xué)成長的心路歷程。

作者的觀察非常細(xì)致，用詞準(zhǔn)確。對于兩次不同的別離，父母的反應(yīng)是不同的。作者通過細(xì)膩的筆觸描寫了這些不同之處，比如第一次父母離去時是staggered out，一步一回頭，而第二次孩子長大了，父母的道別少了幾分牽掛，多了幾分信心。作者對環(huán)境的描寫以及自己的行為、表現(xiàn)在兩次分離中也是各不相同的，值得讀者細(xì)細(xì)體味。

作者的語言也很出色，使用了對比、排比、比喻等修辭手段，起到了很好的效果。最后一段的語言尤其出色，顯示了作者對語言的熟練掌握。