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Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which do you prefer?
第一段
In most cases, some people think that it is parents’ responsibility to take care of the whole family (1) out of various reasons and factors in situations, while others do not think so, which sound reasonable but ironical based on the fickle situations in society and history. As for me, despite the adventure of being entitled as “absolutist”, I will consistently support that older children should share the burden and be required to take care of their younger siblings (2).
填充內(nèi)容：
(1) 轉(zhuǎn)述題目，或反對的觀點(diǎn)
這道題是個選擇類的題目，問及：究竟是完全由父母來擔(dān)起照顧家庭的責(zé)任，還是應(yīng)該要求年長一點(diǎn)的孩子來照顧弟弟妹妹。這邊填充的部分就只需要選擇一個與自己立場相反的觀點(diǎn)來寫即可。譬如說，我的立場是：長兄長姐應(yīng)該照顧弟弟妹妹，那么空格(1)只需要填充對立的觀點(diǎn)：父母來承擔(dān)全部責(zé)任。
(2) 自己的立場態(tài)度
第二段
Maybe a lot of people stress the suspect of the authenticity of my point of view, but what I want to demonstrate is, this idea has been certified by our predecessor hundreds of years ago. Abraham Lincoln, for instance, is known as a great man respected by all of the American people, not merely because of his remarkable feat of leading the Union in Civil War and of emancipating the slaves in the South but because of the records and the anecdotes popular in politicians and socialists, telling the story of his family, education background and policies he made to seek his dream. And the reason why he can achieve such a howling success is closely related to the opinion I am holding now. However, despite the seeming irrelevance of the example, try to imagine, if this idea is not accepted doubtlessly, that means Lincoln refused to take the responsibility to take care of his little brothers (3). Consecutively, Lincoln would, in no ways become the man in our memory with integrity and love, as a result of which, he would never be supported by his senators and his people, let alone the fact that he can lead all the northern people to win such a historical battle.
填充內(nèi)容：
(3) 結(jié)合例子引入反對的觀點(diǎn)
注意，這邊不是直白地表達(dá)自己反對的觀點(diǎn)!而是，結(jié)合林肯的例子，假設(shè)林肯他拒絕照顧弟弟妹妹，拒絕分擔(dān)家庭責(zé)任，那么他也不會成為我們記憶中那個正直有愛的偉人了，那么他也無法獲得人們的支持和信賴，更不用說最后在美國自由史上書下光輝的一筆了。這樣寫，在保證例子完整性的同時，又突出了觀點(diǎn)。
第三段
Admittedly there are still some people who probably think that the time and space makes Lincoln a rare example, which cannot be cited as a ground support to the idea mentioned above. In our daily life, another example, the experience of my friend Jane can help to substantiate what I have held. Jane is a single mother in our lab who always wants to get success in her field. However, the efforts she has made never yield any return. The factor leading to this is thatshe wants to fully control both her work and children while her elder son has repeatedly expressed his willing to share the burden and look after his little brother (3). Although we cannot attribute the unpromising end to the assumption she takes granted, it is a fact that she never thought about other alternative options and just go straight in her own way. So the influence originated, developed and stimulated by the insane hypothesis should be considered a critical element.
填充內(nèi)容：
(3) 結(jié)合例子引入反對的觀點(diǎn)
結(jié)合朋友Jane的例子，分析她為什么無法在工作上取得成功的原因。因?yàn)樗认肴湓诠ぷ魃希植幌敕艞墝⒆拥恼疹櫋Ｈ欢~和熊掌不可兼得，盡管她的大兒子反復(fù)表達(dá)了他愿意分擔(dān)家庭重?fù)?dān)，照顧弟弟的態(tài)度，但她仍然不放心，全權(quán)控制。盡管我們不能把這個作為她失敗的唯一因素，但她無法平衡家庭和工作的事實(shí)，也是不可忽略的。
第四段
There also exists the fact that some other people still think that parents would be a better mentor for children’s growth (1), but it is obvious that it just helps in some specific situations, which pales in comparison to its opposite claim to such a huge extent that it is unnecessary to approve or disprove it.
填充內(nèi)容：
(1) 反對的觀點(diǎn)
第四段是個小的讓步段。點(diǎn)明：還是有一些人支持對立的觀點(diǎn)，認(rèn)為家長是更合適的導(dǎo)師來引導(dǎo)孩子的成長。但這是要在特定環(huán)境下才成立的。權(quán)衡左右，其實(shí)我們也無須過于糾結(jié)于此。注意，這段的重點(diǎn)在于讓步的態(tài)度，邏輯方面體現(xiàn)作者的批判性思維，語言方面體現(xiàn)作者運(yùn)用的嫻熟。所以只需簡單帶到反對的態(tài)度即可。
第五段
So, judging from the reasoning and examples as well as the sub points I presented as above, we can easily draw the conclusion that older children of the family should be required to look after the younger children (2). Just as everybody knows, coins has their sides, but this fact cannot weaken the argument that there is always a side can be considered more by some people, and cannot weaken the argument that older children also play an indispensable role in a family(2).
填充內(nèi)容：
(2) 自己的立場態(tài)度
結(jié)尾部分要重申自己的立場，再一次強(qiáng)調(diào)：哥哥姐姐有責(zé)任應(yīng)該要照顧自己的弟弟妹妹，他們在家庭中有著不可取代的地位。
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