實例講解析托福寫作備考需要辯證地看獨立性寫作
托福寫作中如何用辯證的態(tài)度去應(yīng)對托福獨立性寫作呢?下面小編通過一篇范文來為大家講解,希望大家能夠從中發(fā)現(xiàn)一些對自己備考有用的東西。下面就跟小編一起來看看吧。
題目:If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose ? Why ? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
如果你被要求送一樣可以代表你國家的東西到一個國際展覽,你會選擇什么? 為什么?用具體的原因和細(xì)節(jié)解釋你的選擇。
范文如下:
When asked to send something representative of their country to an international exhibition, most people tend to think of specific objects. However,I would send something completely different: one week’s worth of television programming. I feel that TV programs are a good representation of my country because they show how we live, what we value, and what we teach our children.
◎ 這個開始段寫得好,最大的特點是:清晰 ( clarity ).清晰的中心論點 (thesis statement ): one week’s worth of television programming.讓讀者一開始就了解文章的“統(tǒng)攝性 governing”的觀點。隨后,作者列舉了三個論點:展示了我們?nèi)绾紊?how we live),我們珍視什么( what we value ),我們教孩子們什么( what we teach our children)。”萬事開頭難“,有了這個開始,這篇文章的”連貫 coherence”就有保證,讀者也就有了“沒有懸念的閱讀”,這正是托福獨立性寫作的核心:展示“三識“---知識( knowledge ),常識 ( common sense ) 和見識( insight )。事實上,ETS的評委并沒有一定要期待”驚世駭俗的論點“,觀點只要清楚,合理即可。下面,就是一個”自圓其說 。Convincing “的過程。
TV programs show how we live in my country. For example, they show the different ways we make our living. The different kinds of houses we live in, the different types of relationships we have, and the different sorts of activities that fill our days. In short, they give a broad representation of daily life in my country.
◎ 段落寫作中,可以展示一個考生寫作能力的要素是三個:銜接cohesiveness, 邏輯logic and 措辭wording 。這一段中的 cohesiveness 在哪里? For example...... In short......,一個是“例證 examplification “,另外一個是 ”總結(jié) summarization “, 讓讀者能一下“辨識 identification “”Inter-sentences logic 句際邏輯”。這是段落寫作中需要經(jīng)常練習(xí)的。其次是邏輯,邏輯要如何得到保證? “語法 grammar”,這一段中用了一個賓語從句,四個定語從句。尤其是四個定語從句的使用,是按照排比結(jié)構(gòu)來使用的,這種語言上的處理,又把英語寫作提升到了一個高度:”修辭 rhetoric “.再來看”措辭 wording”,從題目中的 “representative 到這個段落中的representation “這樣的詞性轉(zhuǎn)換應(yīng)用了英文語法的另外一個概念”nominalization 名詞化“,這讓整個作文的行文更加”抽象abstract”和”正式 formal “.
TV programs also show what we value in my country. Comedy programs, for instance, demonstrate what we think is funny, while documentaries show what issues we are concerned about and how we want to resolve them. Sports programs show which sports are more and less popular as well as how we approach competition. In general, the range of programs that appear on TV demonstrate what we think is important and interesting and worth our while to spend time on.
◎ 這一段寫作值得學(xué)習(xí)的是寫作手法和語言的表達(dá)。寫作手法來說,最主要的是對”value”的解釋,使用了”classification 分類“的方法:comedy, documentary and sports,選擇表現(xiàn)”價值“的這三個方面具有代表性,也是文章中心”電視“最主要的內(nèi)容。在語言寫作上: demonstrate what is funny; show what we concern and how we resolve; how we approach competition. 這幾組詞的動詞搭配和選擇非常”準(zhǔn)確 accurate”,符合語言“達(dá)”的層次。
Children’s programs show what we think is important to teach our children. Some programs are designed to specifically teach reading and math skills. Others expose children to classic stories from literature or to traditional folktales. And some programs, such as cartoons are simply meant to be enjoyed, which is also something we teach our children to do.
You can learn a good deal about a country by watching its television programs. You can learn about daily life, values, and education. That is why I would send a week’s worth of TV programs from my country to an international exhibition.
上面就是為大家?guī)淼挠棉q證的態(tài)度對待托福獨立性寫作,希望對大家托福寫作備考有幫助。最后小編預(yù)祝大家托福考試能取得理想的成績。
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