【寫作提分】詳解托福寫作首段的重要性
在托福寫作教學過程中，經常碰到我們學員在寫作大作文的開頭的時候廢話連篇，長度爆長，句子惡心，基本都屬于見光死開頭，也就是說文章開頭如果這么寫的話，基本就被劃到5分或以下的檔次了。
比如：
見光死系列
With the development of society and economy， more and more children spend more and more time on computer playing more and more. Some people who are strongly against it think that it has negative effects on them both physically and mentally. In my opinion， I think that children should not play computer， they need choose other games.
名師講解如何寫好開頭
這就是傳說中的見光死開頭!首段又臭又長，不是說不能寫長，而是空有長度，沒有內容，考官看完會直接傻掉。很多同學喜歡寫with the development of society and economy 這樣的開頭，其實寫過作文的人就知道，這是典型的中式思維模式在作怪。英國人的思維方式和我們不同，他們重視細節，講究單刀直入，所以開頭的廢話連篇會直接讓考官感到反感，惡心，進而影響整篇文章的分數。還有那個經典的more and more，重復太多明顯缺乏詞匯量。
下面是托福寫作的優秀范文：
I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day. This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of a young child， regardless of what they are using the computer for.
這個開頭就非常符合英國人的口味，不但開頭沒有任何廢話和空洞的內容，相反，句子充滿務實，具體的風格，而且，開頭的最后一句話是對中間段落的一點提示，有過渡的作用。
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