2010年雅思大作文點評:多文化社會的優缺點
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Multi-cultural societies are mixtures of ethnic groups. To what extent do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?
Multi-cultural（這是形容詞，怎么作主語了？！） has been brought to spotlight recently, as a prevailing phenomenon nowadays（多余） that the countries on the earth are becoming more and more exchanged（這個句子很晦澀，as在這里是作連詞嗎？如果是的話，它應該引導一個句子，那么后面只有that引導的同位語從句，卻沒有主句的謂語動詞了！！！）.People at every corner to share and enjoy the same spiritual life together(同樣地，這個句子沒有謂語動詞), which not only promote a climate of peace and prosperity but also enrich the city life and broaden the horizons of human beings. Such a trend has both merits and demerits although, as for me, the former prevails over the latter obviously. （80words）
結構分析：前面寫了n句話，都是在引題，但是內容顯得有點 主站蜘蛛池模板： 年辖：市辖区| 文安县| 遂宁市| 龙陵县| 晴隆县| 泰顺县| 大丰市| 鄂托克旗| 比如县| 延庆县| 嵊州市| 普宁市| 楚雄市| 靖远县| 镇安县| 江达县| 新田县| 新津县| 随州市| 高淳县| 临西县| 城市| 昭觉县| 景德镇市| 方山县| 江孜县| 龙南县| 元江| 新密市| 乌拉特后旗| 抚州市| 勐海县| 法库县| 广州市| 彩票| 榆社县| 漳州市| 孝感市| 丘北县| 宽甸| 巴林右旗|
Multi-cultural（這是形容詞，怎么作主語了？！） has been brought to spotlight recently, as a prevailing phenomenon nowadays（多余） that the countries on the earth are becoming more and more exchanged（這個句子很晦澀，as在這里是作連詞嗎？如果是的話，它應該引導一個句子，那么后面只有that引導的同位語從句，卻沒有主句的謂語動詞了！！！）.People at every corner to share and enjoy the same spiritual life together(同樣地，這個句子沒有謂語動詞), which not only promote a climate of peace and prosperity but also enrich the city life and broaden the horizons of human beings. Such a trend has both merits and demerits although, as for me, the former prevails over the latter obviously. （80words）
結構分析：前面寫了n句話，都是在引題，但是內容顯得有點 主站蜘蛛池模板： 年辖：市辖区| 文安县| 遂宁市| 龙陵县| 晴隆县| 泰顺县| 大丰市| 鄂托克旗| 比如县| 延庆县| 嵊州市| 普宁市| 楚雄市| 靖远县| 镇安县| 江达县| 新田县| 新津县| 随州市| 高淳县| 临西县| 城市| 昭觉县| 景德镇市| 方山县| 江孜县| 龙南县| 元江| 新密市| 乌拉特后旗| 抚州市| 勐海县| 法库县| 广州市| 彩票| 榆社县| 漳州市| 孝感市| 丘北县| 宽甸| 巴林右旗|