英語(yǔ)四級(jí)高分作文范文批改（1）
英語(yǔ)四級(jí)待批改作文：
Owing to the quikening pace of life and ever--increasing pressure,the number of people who are surffering problems of mental health has greatly increased.According to the recent statistics by Chinese Academy of Social Sciences,60% mental health issues are responsible for many physical diseases.
There are a kind of factors for the dramatic growth.First of all,due to the quikening of urban life,competition goes increasingly fierce in all walks of life.This phenomenon puts more pressure on us Chinese in current society.In addition,we haven't received necessary supports from my relatives and friends.last but not least,we are lacking in the ability of international communication.We are so shy that we cannot talk to anyone about our inner thought freely.
In my opinion,there is no denying that further attention must be paid to the problem of mental health.We should take effective actions to prevent the situation.For one thing,it's necessary for us to expand the range of our communication.For another,we should enhance our ability to face various challenges in life.Only in this way can we become winners in this competitive world ,and will have a briliant future.
作文批改如下：
Owing to the quikening（改為fast） pace of life and ever--increasing pressure,the number of people who are surffering(改為 suffering)problems of mental health has greatly increased.According to the recent statistics by Chinese Academy of Social Sciences,60% mental health issues are responsible for many physical diseases.
There are a kind of（改為many）factors for the dramatic growth.First of all,due to the quikening(改為fast pace) of urban life,competition goes increasingly fierce in all walks of life.This phenomenon puts more pressure on us Chinese in current society.In addition,we haven't received necessary supports from my(改為our)relatives and friends.last (首字母大寫)but not least,we are lacking in the ability of international（用詞錯(cuò)誤，改為interpersonal）communication.We are so shy that we cannot talk to anyone about our inner thought freely.
In my opinion,there is no denying that further attention must be paid to the problem of mental health.We should take effective actions to prevent the situation.For one thing,it's necessary for us to expand the range of our communication.For another,we should enhance our ability to face various challenges in life.Only in this way can we become winners in this competitive world ,and （加we）will have a briliant (拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為brilliant）future.
同學(xué)你好，作文整體寫的不錯(cuò)，但是要在細(xì)節(jié)上多加注意，拼寫錯(cuò)誤的問題盡量不要出現(xiàn)，另外，不要在一個(gè)句子中一會(huì)用we,一會(huì)又用I。
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