BEC名師點評作文（7）
BEC商務英語，商務英語考試中的No.1，含金量已經無需多言。但是，無論是還在猶豫是否要參加BEC考試的，還是已經通過BEC考試的，都在疑惑到底學了BEC有什么用呢?讓我們通過下面的學習來看看BEC到底都能讓我們獲得什么。
作文題目：
You are the manager of a small office. In order toreduce costs and improve the company'senvironmental practices, you have decided to collectand recycle all paper used in the office.
Write a memo of 40-50 words
informing staff of the new policy.
explaining how the paper will be collected
requesting staff to co-operate with the scheme.
參考作文：
Sample 48 words
TO: All staff
From: Paul Blake
Please note that from next Monday we are introducing an environmentally friendly scheme.All used paper from the office will be recycled. Used sheets should be placed in the green binnext to the photocopier for collection. All staff ate asked for their full cooperation with thisscheme.
網友作文一：
TO:All staff
FROM:Manager
RE:recycle paper policy
In order to reduce costs and improve our company's environmental practices,I decide to[1]collect and recycle all paper used in the office.you shoud place your paper in the green boxnear the fountain before 6 pm on friday,we will recycle them once a week.
Cooperate please[2].
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[1]你不是公司的助理或者負責清潔的吧?怎么自己去collect paper? 改為：it is decided to ....
[2]這句話應該放在上面一段的最尾。不是please, 而是we need your cooperation.
網友作文二：
To: All staff
From: Mr. Za
Here is the new policy aim to[1] reduction the costs[2] and improvement of theenvironmental practices of our company. Used paper in this office, on effect of this policy,should be collected by one appointed clerk each day for recycle use by selling them to recyclebin for a profit. [3] Please cooperate with this policy for our own good and each one will servethe duty in turn. [4]
Thank you
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[1]結構問題，后面應該是分詞做定語或狀語，改為：aiming to
[2]反了，應該是：cost reduction 另外，aim to 是個動詞詞組，to 是介詞么? 后面應該是動詞詞組。
[3]公司要靠賣廢品來取得利潤么?這句話說得可是太掉價了。去掉吧。
[4]去掉。
網友作文三：
To: All staff
From:Mrs Li
I would like to inform all of you that we would formulate a new policy of recycling the usedpaper in order for reducing the official stationery expences and meeting the environmentneeds. This policy will be implemented on 12.11.08 by putting the used paper in a certain(space)[1] . I hope all staff should could be co-operative with the scheme
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[1]如果地點不確定，還不如不說。
網友作文四：
TO:all staff
FROM:Kathy
DATE: 19,OCT
SUBJECT: new policy
I am writing to infome you the new policy about paper using[1] in our office, in order toreduce our expenses and to make our working enviroment better, [2] paper will be collected byourselives and then reuse them, please put the eused paper in the designated box instead ofthrowing it directly into the scrap basket, I hope we can co-operate on this policy.
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[1]Being used考試大論壇
[2]這和改善你們的工作環境毫無關系，去掉。
網友作文五：
To: All staff
From:Management department
I am pleased to inform you that [1]all used paper in photocopy or printing could be recyled.As we know there are many papers [2]of which one side could be used again.
So please put the all-used paper in the red box beside the duplicator. and the one side-blank paper,pls put in the blue box.
I would like all of you obey the command[3]. Thank you.
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[1]公司新政策的發布不用這么開心，開頭正規些就可以了。
[2]這是不可數名詞，there is a lot of paper....
[3]cooperate
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